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Beyond the gates |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
Making mistakes in how I learn in life, Yet no change with me it is beyond the price, Eirre walk of untime death, Walking in the line one fire with no regrets, Surly be as Surly done, Beyond the gates time for fun, What is this place, Where do I stand, Pressed beyond this mortal coral, Meeting people for have sinned and with no morals, I stand in front the gates of fate, Waiting until the time they open so I can take my place, I am wisked beyond endless moutains and beyond the seas, And beyond the gates I can step free, Beyond the fire the burns in my soul, Beyond my temper the make me lose control, Even beyond life all itself, Beyond the gates just set free, Beyond the gates come with me. Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ahh! Library piece! And your very best. I am serious! This was outstanding, Jay! Give yourself a pat on the back! ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
I am very happy that you liked it I was wondering because my mind just froze towards the end  Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wow this is really good really amazing thoughts keep writing my friend "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, odd how only Allan has replied to this. Wonderful poem. Back to Page 1!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Wow! This is a great piece! This is going straight into my library! *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
thanks I was starting to wonder if anyone was going to relpy Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Well done Jay. Nice poem. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
*****speechless****** Just remember even if I cant say something in reply that sometimes not saying anything at all has the most meaning.... sorry I really am speechless right now. The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
yes I know angel I get quiet sometimes too. yet with even saying nothing only your reply show me that you liked it Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Well, Angel..you could always be like me when I get speechless.. I just go like this (cause I'm speechless now too  ) Ditto! Jay..this was a very powerful poem! I'm glad to see you are getting better in your poetry. Thanks for being my friend   [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 03-13-2001).] |
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