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Sonnet VII - White Haven
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Sonnet VII - White Haven |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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NOTE: Just peering outside I decided to write yet another delayed sonnet... I hanvnt written enough of these yet! haha! Enjoy....this might be part of a seasons series..  ‘Sonnet VII - White Haven’ Fluffy whites swarm all our land down below Leaving no idealist windows to see Bending, arching branches handshake the snow And the inconscient sun waste’s no beauty A white out for sure, blinds the naked eye Igloos for our homes and shovels for war The air as ground, penetrating the sky Interblending to clouds, now in a roar Icicles from snow’s eyes formate so clear Frosty vegetation; need not to grow Animals that hibernate sleep the year As motionless rivers seem not to flow Captivating occasions stir the white Blanketing us from the faraway light Jeremy D Raulinaitis [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Outstanding! You and your sonnets... hehe  *shakes his head* Well I don't mind reading 'em, so keep on posting 'em! Funny how a format can grow addictive, isn't it? Trust me bro, I have been there. In fact, I ~still~ write 20 senryu/haiku a day but they are all just rusty words that I won't bother posting.  Just make sure you don't let it take anything away from your other styles. I had this problem for a bit. Either way, good job Mr Knightfellow.  ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
this must really suck! JR "The *bump for jeremydraul's work, hahaha!!" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Winter? BRRRRRRRRRRRRRrrrrrrr once again Winter? BRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! nicely done  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
wow! very good piece! I loved it... nice work. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
This sonnet truly made me smile with joy. You have such a way with your words.. I cant explain it but it is magnificent!! I liked this very much and keep up the great work. The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ah Jer it is good to be reading your sonnets again!! How the hell can you say 'This must really suck'? Geez...far from it. This one would have to take first place for the favourite sonnets. As I am a Winter person and totally love winter, it brings such wonderful images into my head. You already know where this is heading. ~AF~ "To alcohol! The cause of - and solution to - all of life's problems!" Homer Simpson |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
never cease to amaze me my friend maybe you should change your name to William we'll change the last name next time keep sharing thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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