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forever_unsuppressed New Member
since 2001-02-01
Posts 5 |
Wake Up I watch you shake As I decide to chop you up into my masterpiece Your fingers swell with catacomb Fearing only my deception Can I keep you alive While killing your body Your apathy is what I can't deserve My pen is the knife I hold against your throat Caging your every emotion within my battlefield Perceive how much you hate me I hate you more I'll touch you till you're sore You can't realize you defeat when you're sucking out this floor from beneath my feet Vicariously leave the front door open I don't know what your constitution stands for Broken liquid Impossibilities Vodtka streaming down my lips and cheeks Drink me sour Another half an hour and your dead Wake up |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh wow, this was great. The syle of this is quite appealing to me. Outstanding work!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
............................................................................................................................My eyes are open wider than the width of the pacific ocean............... ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
haha... cute, Carly.  And this poem was outstanding. Very excellent work. I'm loving what I am seeing of yours. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
I know exactly how this is. So much control. My ex b/f had so much control. i loved him so much and i still do. i can't get over him saying goodbye to me. It still hurts so much and I guess it always will, but I will move on cuz no one holds me back. I hope you can feel the same. Very good poem, keep writing! *~Rachael |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice poem, are you a Rage Against The Machine Fan? If you're not, your poem sure fooled me. I have written quite a few Rage influenced songs/poems, just can't share this on this board.Excellent Job! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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forever_unsuppressed New Member
since 2001-02-01
Posts 5 |
I'm a huge Rage Against The Machine fan. Thnx to all. |
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