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Convicted in the court of my heart.
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Convicted in the court of my heart. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Full of hate and bitterness With nothing left to do Just wait and be a witness For when they trial you I've committed no crimes Just jealous of those men I told you many times But i'll tell you once again and I just can't change that bear me if you can or discard me as your tat I'm only good for one thing My vitriolic prose I just shout and scream, cannot sing I feel naked in my clothes You took away my heart and polluted my last breath So finally I depart But not into my death I'm waiting for the hatred to burn me deep inside I know that you have waited Until i had no pride All i've left is poetry And now you've polluted it I feel that I'm not free but constricted by all of it I'm slowly losing touch and hope that they'll convict I'm not hoping for much Only that there strict I'd hate to see you go but you've forced me into this I think i'll ruin the flow but I couldn't give a damn. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hehe... interesting ending. And nothing personal, but the title made me snicker. Just a bit cute. That's all.  It's a pretty good poem. "I feel naked in my clothes" caught my eye. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, I liked this one. Especially the end.....the last line was great. You are quite the poet!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~and i mean Wow~ this was awesome. i especially liked.."All I have left is poetry" and the last line. Leaves you wanting to read more  Keep it up and i cant wait to see you post more*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
WOW. That was very moving. You also use a very interesting analogy. Keep it up. This is definetly a library poem! *Me* *If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything* *A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things* |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is the first time I have read anything of your's, and I am very impressed. I will be looking for more. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I really, really liked this. The same line that caught Allan's eye caught mine as well...very nice word choices in this. Great job. ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
such strong emotional content seems like the quality of poetry in the forum in imporved so much you've just proved that thanks for the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
WOW...An extremely powerful piece. This is heading into my library right now. Keep producing works of art like this! It is truly brilliant. ~AF~ "To alcohol! The cause of - and solution to - all of life's problems!" Homer Simpson |
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