Teen Poetry #4 |
A new person at a brand new low |
Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
A New person all dressed in white stands my door,pushing it open no more trust, and no more crys for help Too bad for you, her short dark hair covers her eyes, an evil stare full of anger and mistrust is placed upon you Her anger coils tightly around your neck squeezing all the betrayal and phony words until there is nothing left but bones A smooth, bitter laugh ripples the air evil smiles and looks of utter contempt plague your heart night and night eating away at your core, bringing you into the same empty void of pain she lives in, a smooth tanned hand reaches out and pushes you into her pain making you feel the pain you caused her A bitter laugh ripples the air leaving you to soak in her misery Regina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was pretty dark......i liked it though. Nicely done here Ina......yer quite good at that kind of poetry. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh my... This is your best poem, Regina. I can't say much more than that... very dark, excellent personifications and techniques... Splendid! Absolutely amazing! Obviously, going to the library. Best poem on page one, IMHO. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Very beautiful, Regina! One of your best.. I loved it. Keep it up. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very dark indeed what's troubling you hun? If i can help at all, even as an ear, you know just message me on icq i'm usually on but invisible "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Acire, you should put some of us on your "visible" list. Or don't we deserve it? I'm putting this to page one. Regina is an amazing poet and this work of art should be seen by more people. If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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