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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Wind is blowing, shut the door Leave behind the scars you wore Travel down an empty street Snow is falling, cry defeat Footsteps press against the cold Must keep treading, must be bold Turn your face into the wind See the darkness, often sinned Pass a home, with lights shine bright Serve as refuge from the night Head is lowered, see it not Dreams are born on army cot Kick a lamp, fade to a dim Sigh for wasted freezing limb Shiver slightly, kiss the frost Moon is mourning for the lost Reach the edge of asphalt bleak Enter forest, try to seek Magic dreamland, all your own Brush a branch upon the bone See the traintracks, stretch afar Stand between the edge's bar Wish for coming of an end Not a whistle late to send Wish no more, open your eyes Train won't come, look to the skies Answer lies within the clouds Extend an arm for distant shrouds Leave the forest, pixies dead Trudge thru mud with lowered head Open door without a sound Wait for morning's sunrise bound. [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 03-05-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is actually very good, Carly. An excellent portrayal of the wonders of taking a walk through the town. (which is what I gathered from it  )Pure Carly magic. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-05-2001).] |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey Carly! Glad you posted! And I don't think it's "pure Carly magic", but just pure magic, Carly. lol, but they're almost all like that, so maybe he was right :-) "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was simply wonderful carly. Nicely done here. What a beautiful poem. I liked it even though you don't trust me.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Carly --- I see a similarity with Vreni's style on this one This proves why i always say you are very talented you have a broad imagination "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this poem. I got something a little different out of it than just a walk in town, but that's probably just my dark little mind.Great job though. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Wow! This is a stunning poem...wow! What more can I say... Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Carly, this is awesome. VERY well done.  |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Carly, VERY nicely done here. The expression is beautiful! I loved it.. *click* into my library. Well done *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." [This message has been edited by Tears of Glass (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Carly, This poem is really amazing! You are really talented! I loved it! I love you. Your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
If this poem is saying what I think it is it is very sad. *leaves it at that* An amzing poem carly. Truly amazing. It read beautifully and had great imagery. Hope things cheer up for ya, Jason [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
quite beautiful my dear Carly Wonderful read as always..keep it up!!*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thanks guys for your replies...You are the best...It means the world to me to know that you like what I write...Stay cool forever, all of you... ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
see, i told you so  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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