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Sonnet V - Ripened Eyes
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Sonnet V - Ripened Eyes |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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‘Sonnet V – Ripened Eyes’ Drapes of awareness ripen my dim eyes Leaving me staring aimlessly ahead What can I do? after numerous tries Looking over to satin sheets from bed Rescue my head, it fills with painful ache Beating, pounding my ears abruptly so When I slumbered before, must I awake? One more attempt to sleep and to let go An enduring wink of two weary eyes Shuffling the visions in my mind so stable Dreaming a figure so pure; two soft thighs Assuring myself, knowing I am able Lounge my head upon cotton clouds to dream Now I’ve diminished night’s devilry scheme! Jeremy D. Raulinaitis When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 03-06-2001).] |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Enjoyed! Sonnets aren't easy, but you've pulled it off... |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
thanks master! Wait a minute, you guys like DreadedLiver more than me? Were the same person, that cant be!! He has more replies... waaaaahh!!! JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
haha, you fool! "The *bump for jeremydraul's work, hahaha!!" |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Sonnets arent easy........and you did an amazing job. Regina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NIcely done here jer!!! I really liked this.....i put it to a song and composed a bit of it......i liked how it sounded.......but......right after i did it....i forgot how it went haha.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
Wowwy.. thanks yall! JR "The *bump for jeremydraul's work, hahaha!!" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Clever! Two soft thighs sound good about now.  j/kYou did good! Hope the sonnet trend continues. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
JD meet WS WS meet JD "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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