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My Savior
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My Savior |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA 
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You saved me from the pit of my own despair When no one would help me you were always there You gave me the strength i needed to be the girl you saw inside of me You picked me up when i was down and helped me find solid ground You made me see theres more to life then lost love,broken hearts ,and strife you made believe i was something strong in your eyes i could do wrong you healed my fractured heart you mended it when it was torn apart you helped me to fall in love again but how could i not? your the perfect man The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought that what you were trying to say was quite sweet. However, I found the flow to be kind of off. Maybe you oughta work on that a bit....anyhow, nice done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is absolutely outstanding. Very sweet poem. It's good to hear this person is helping you with your life.  As for what Dopey said, it didn't really bother me but it never hurts to fragment a few lines in order to help the flow. I hope to see more of your work. Always a pleasure, Jen. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
AWW! I loved it! It's so great that you found someone like this. I'm waiting for my turn!  Very nice poem. Very beautiful.. what more can I say?*Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That was really sweet....the ending sums up the whole poem...thanks for sharing this Jenabou...I'm glad you're doing good "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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