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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Go back to yesterday, so I can live again, so I can love again, so I can speak again. Go back to last year, so I can grow again, so I can learn again, so I can leave again. Rewind backwards, fly through time, what's gone is gone, what's yours is mine. Go back to tomorrow, so I can see what will be, so I can learn what will come, so I can adjust to the change. Go back to today, so I can live my life like this, so I can love you life this, so you won't leave me like this. Rewind. (sort of sung this as I wrote it) I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Looks like everybody is posting songs today. Is there something I don't know? Anyway nicely done here. I thought this was great. I really thought the ending was powerful....the last word.....it would sound good if the person singing it said it and it just echoed into a fade out.... wow...nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, what's it with songs?  This one was great. I like songs that have this kind of a format to them (repetitions of lines with one word different, etc.) You did a superfine job.  ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks u 2, ya know i love you both! I dunno what's up with songs. But they are pretty cool. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i like it Allysa but it makes me sad to see you hurting hope things do get better for ya keep writing i know it helps "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
not hurtin' when it comes to love. But when it comes to hate, and Jesica, I guess I'm in permanaent denial. But don't feel bad, because it's okay, because I know it won't always be like this. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
well I'm glad to see that you are actually taking it better than what your poem shows good for ya "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks, ya know I love ya. Byes. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
no prob you gonna join us on icq yet? "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
alright, acire, i want to talk to you. you seem like a pretty rational person to me, so i was just wondering if you could possibly tell me why a lot of my friends seem to have a problem with the fact that i liker justin. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i need more info than that Allysa there could be different reasons right now, based on the little knowledge i know about your situation, maybe you should listen to your friends seems like Justin is never there for you "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
Very nice poem! It explains one of my loves. Unfortunately, life has no remote, you can't rewind it. <3~*Rachael*~<3 |
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