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Again, it's February...
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Again, it's February... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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Again it’s February and again the snow Absorbs all colors of the sleeping planet. And only footprints bare a patch of granite,-- The rest is white and there’s nowhere to go. The hour and the minute hand combine And fall in unison upon the number twelve. I sit behind the desk, all by myself,-- My mind is blank, I can’t complete a line. The pale moon bewitches and enchants... I cannot focus on my verse. Instead, I think of you. And next room, in my bed, You are asleep, and life, again, makes sense. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Constructive critiques? lol, my friend you need it not! Your work captures me every time I read it. Your work dominates my library. Well anyway, I love this,een though it's March now, we're still getting snow too :-) I love snow..!! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ok I thought the poem was ok....not your best......but I did absolutely LOVE the last line. Thought it was amazing.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Constructive Critiques: here is one...hope you don't get mad I think you should take that off cause we are always amazed with your poems and have nothing to say. In other words, we are always speechless  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
hmm, def. not one of ur best but quite interesting...good job bro JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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