Teen Poetry #4 |
Mascara Lynne |
jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
NOTE: 'Bout the situation. Ughhhh 'Mascara Lynne' Mascara eyes, an inky look, Shedding blackish hued tears Maybe a finger, or tissue will due, To wipe away your fears Rest your head upon my thigh, Cry until your eyes are dry Look into my soul so deep, Weep a tear, don’t ask me why Your sunny strands tangle me, And sweet fingers feather skin Forget your dreaded issues, Just love me so, my Lynne To Lynne, Jeremy D. Raulinaitis When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A wonderful message of unconditional love and support ... nice cadence and rhyme Jeremy! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I surely hope your GF gets well and is ok. Very unfortunate thing that has happened. Great poem. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
And they say guys don't show they're feelings. You're her angel JD "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
thanks u 3... means a lot to hear people care even tho they dont even know us.. thats so awesome plus this poem sucks JR "zzzIzzzAMzzzJEREMYDRAULzzz" |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow this is really great. I'm so pathetic, I think this is really sweet, lol. Good luck, I hope things get better... Bel |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I love your critique messege I don't think this poem sucks, you've got it all wrong. Thank you for sharing this, it does say a lot. "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" Unknown "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." Unkno |
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