Teen Poetry #4 |
Soul Searching (poem about highschool) |
HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
~i was on a bus on a school field trip, when i noticed a classmate of mine staring at me when i wasn't looking in her direction... i've always been known to try and figure out what someone else's mind is going through... this is what i thought she was thinking/what i sometimes feel as well You see a classmate ahead of you on the bus She's quite the different one You wonder what it would be like if, She knew you existed You wonder if she even knows your name You can't help but stare at her soul Because it's like a hand reaching out for help You want to be her friend Because you know she's different You know that if you two were friends You would be the best of But you also know you'd be the best of one Because she's never had one The bus stops and you both step off at the same time She stops and lets you go You nod And she calls your name saying, "See you later" She makes your day Because you know she knows your name And it's the beginning of a true friendship THe one you'll cherish forever Just because you were soul searching And her soul just happened to be waiting "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
A powerful and hopeful piece here. Made me a little sad, because I can relate to being so alone very well...especially on the bus...but anyways, a wonderful, heartfelt piece here. I only wish that there were more people out there like you. *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow that was very sincere and sweet. I always think that interacting with a broad array of people is such a good thing to do, as I guess you do too. Very good poem, so so clear! JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. sweet I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
great piece i must say. i don't believe i have ever read your work before, but it is very beautiful. i hope to soon read more. until then keep up the great work. chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wow wow wow i really felt that i love this poem what truth and what a realization i'm glad you're giving her the chance though she seems to be different from the rest things like that shouldn't matter at all you have a beautiful heart "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I agree with Dopey and acire. They pretty much said it all. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Thanks for ur guys' comments! "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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