Teen Poetry #4 |
If I were to....Would you? |
sinfully_seductive Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 31 |
If I were to expose all that I am Would you accept me? If I were to unlock all my mysteries Would you accept me? If I were to show you feelings like you've never seen before Would you accept me? If I were to open my heart and let out my harbored emotions Would you accept me? If I were to graze your boundary of what is permissable Would you accept me? If I were to put past reality Would you accept me? And if I were to speak to you of my inconceivable feelings and unfulfilled desires Would you still accept me? Would you please extinguish my raging fires And end my lasting hell Just tell me you'd accept my heart And all my feelings within it held |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh, wow that's a good one. I've encountered situations where this poem would be wonderful, thanks! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey this ~is~ good... Acceptance is great but you really should look at who is accepting you. Are they really worth it? ~Allan Welcome to Planet Earth, where the angels tread on the land. ~~Allan, to Amanda. The sunshine hears you not. Speak to the shadows he creates. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow... Harlequin romance better step back... hehe this was great. You should definitly make sure whomever you love accepts you for you... or it's not worth it... nice job!! jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Wow I really liked this poem alot. I thought it was really powerful and you conveyed your emotions really well. Great poem ~Nikki~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NIcely done here. I liked this a lot. I think people worry a lot about being accepted, first you must accept yourself and only then will you truly be happy in being accepted at all. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I like the repetiotions seems like you really dont know if this person likes you for who you are or, have you actually shown him a different side of you and been hiding the truth? great write keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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sinfully_seductive Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 31 |
i just want to express my feelings for this woman and hope she'd still accept me cause i dunno if she's into the "alternative" lifestyles. |
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