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Spite - Had to edit |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA 
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I feel like crap I’m not understood That’s not the point It about doing good I ask your problems And advice I offer But then it gets changed And benefits someone’s coffer “Whose fault is it?” “Well it came from Bryan” What do you want from me people? It’s not my fault she’s crying You people make me sick I’m just being nice! YOU make YOUR mistakes And I get put in the vice! I’m asked for opinions And opinions I never keep- “But that’s not what I wanted to hear” Then go (enjoy the company of) a sheep! I’m goddamn sick of it I’m done holding fast If you have a problem Take it out on me LAST When I offer a compliment “You can’t say that to just a friend” I’m just being nice, so Take your head out of your (rear end) I’m leaving, let me go alone Spare me your bull… Don’t put this on me AGAIN Because I can do without it! My soul wreaks havoc Oh the rest of my life “But you’re Mr. Niceguy” The words mean nothing to my strife Take the stick out of your ear And realize I’m just being kind Anyone who didn’t share a brain Would think me a good find Don’t be a hypocrite Don’t rub me with your games Await your fate, don’t try to escape When I engulf you in these flames Flames of rage that cripple you But I never feel Flames that shred your mind Leave only what is real Remember this poem With all of your heart Because there are SOME PEOPLE Who’ll rip you apart "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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sinfully_seductive Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 31 |
i thoroughly enjoy reading your writing. it's like i can relate to all of it. this was good, in fact, most of it relates to a situation i'm going through right now. anyway, thanx again for sharing. you're a very talented young man. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
.....Bam. ~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good job. But it will still most likely get removed. Furthermore, I'll have to agree with Carly.  ~Allan Welcome to Planet Earth, where the angels tread on the land. ~~Allan, to Amanda. The sunshine hears you not. Speak to the shadows he creates. |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Hey I really like this poem. Personally I don't see why it would get removed but who know. Anyways I think you did an excelent job on this. Thanks for posting it. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Much better version  hope you've finally released all that feeling of anger in you  thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is definately heading into my library. Wonderful read!! It'll be good for when I feel like breaking some noses. ~AF~ Homer: Mmmmm... 64 slices of American cheese. 64 (munch munch munch)... 63 (munch munch munch) (cut to much later) Homer: 2... (munch munch munch) . |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. I thought the anger was expressed quite well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, You did a really good job on this, thank you for sharing it! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.therainforestsite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
amazing....in my library it goes. that anger was so well expressed. Regina |
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