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My World is You
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My World is You |
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MysticalAngel7 Junior Member
since 2001-02-24
Posts 20 |
I feel scared Helpless and vonorable entraped by your love Slowly giving in My world is you But without you What would my life be? Nothing Mysterious? You are! I truely love you But do you love me You say you do But one stab Has already been made Deep and twisted How much hurt Can my heart endure Why? Why do I fall in love And put myself through this? I am so scared One day may come Happily in love... The next... Full of hurt and pain Why are you my world? * This is not one of my better writtings... just something I kinda threw together. So, It may not make much sense... I just wrote what I thought of at that time. * Neither the angels in heaven above,Nor the demons down under the sea,can ever dissever my soul from the soul, of the beautiful Annabel Lee -E.A.Poe |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
not your best but still good...and its vulnerable  just being critical! pretty good poem*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This might now be one of your best, but I'll still say that you still expressed your feelings real good on this one thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this. I thought it was pretty ok. I mean the sentiments within the poem were well express and for that I liked it. Still, not one of your best......but keep posting!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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