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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I saunter unhindered through the shadows, as malignity swells up inside. My eyes are wide shut yet.... the rage will not hide. The forest of iniquity, clutches my breath. I ultimately grasp..... I’m in the lost woods of death!!! I rampage though the leaves to attempt to get out. I am plundering through my distinctive perturbation of doubt. The ebony ink commences to devour my soul... My spirit was seized......and I.. just let it go. I collapsed to the dust from the feebleness of my treacherous plight. The trees covered my reamins and I no longer had the STAMINA..... the WILL POWER.....or the HEART.. to finish my fight. I realized something as one solitary tear shattered the ground, And that mystical and vaporous night I had found; I was not ever in the lost woods of death...... But rather........... Trapped within my own horrendous stone walls of flesh. Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
quite odd style... good poem tho, keep posting Jeremy Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"I was not ever in the lost woods of death...... But rather........... Trapped within my own horrendous stone walls of flesh." OMG!!! This is beautiful hope you don't really feel this way So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Awesome poem.. I liked the style, it's different. Great expression. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
This is really cool. I like it. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hi. acire sent me the link to this poem because he knew I was on the lookout for poetry with a 'nature' theme or analogy. I'd like to ask your permission to use this in the next newsletter for Passions if you don't mind. Just reply here (I'm putting this in my library) or send me an email. (and would you mind if we reformatted it for affect? Thanks. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Poet deVine, It would be a tremendous honor if you would be kind enough to put my work in passions next newsletter.Also, if you wish to reformat it for whatever reasons you may do so. Thank you. Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
WOW - all I have to say, WOW! That is so fantastic. It describes, I think, what all of us feel at some point. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Jeremy & Jennifer~ Yes, I like to try different styles. THank you for your replies. Acrie~ No, I do not feel this way and I am sorry if I made anyone think I did. THank you for your relpy. Greeneyes~ Thank you for your reply Elvenblood~ Thank you so much for your reply It is wonderful to hear you like it so much and I truthfully Appreciate it very much. love always~ Amanda Life is like a storm, it passes you by without even knowing it~Amanda |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very good job on this one. I truly enjoyed this read. I thought this was exceptional!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
This is an exceptional piece. One of those pieces I encounter every now and again that makes me feel very amateur. The use of punctuation to pause on keywords was very well used. Also, very impressive use of vocabulary. Go any further with the vocab and I'm gonna have to start busting out my dictionary. |
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orange()alligator Junior Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 21 |
i have one thing to say....WOW!!! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~ im speechless. your poems are so..oh i cant even come up with an intelligent word. i feel so stupid when i read your poems. i dont reply much cause i cant ever think of anything intelligent to say. but this was great as always *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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