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Undoing the goodbye" (Rengay by Allan Riverwood and Angel in Flight)
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Undoing the goodbye" (Rengay by Allan Riverwood and Angel in Flight) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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(The good thing about having a heartfelt conversation in Rengay format is you get to post it afterwards!  )all the tears are spilled warrior laying down his sword after our goodbyes please, come back to me. let me wipe away your tears. and let us be friends. have I any tears? look into my solid smile speak to me in words if you are happy, I am very sorry, Sir. for making you sad. look into my eyes think about what you just said ~then,~ apoligize. crying now am I, for I see what I have done. one day forgive me. crying, as it were cease begging for forgiveness I already have. a tear trickles down, seeing everything anew. and now I thank you. you who taught me how to love let us fly, as one, above [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 02-24-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
now this is the magic I was talking about!!!! WOW..........I envisioned this conversation and it was amazingly written. Both of you.....bravo. Very very nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was cool!! Lol, I luv it!! Good job on this one! Keep up the awesome work!! Luv Always, ~*~S*W*E*E*T*S*T*U*F*F~*~ How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Allan, Amanda..Nice work. You two always write beautifully together. Keep it up. ~AF~ "Love makes us poets and the approach of death should make us philosophers." ~ George Santayana |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nicely done Allan and Amanda ... you write very well together! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
im so happy! yay! it was beautiful both of u! Regina |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Oh, this is done so well you two, so well. Another great collaboration! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.therainforestsite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Cripes this was STUPENDOUS. I'm totally lovin it. Great job youz guyz. ~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Oooooooh absolutely loved the theme.. undoing the goodbye, pure brilliance...beautiful job! JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Beautiful poem you two. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it" |
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cutie2005 Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148Bennett, Colorado USA |
This was really good.. I really liked reading it... I hope to read more soon..Luv ya, cutie If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This rengay seems to have some special meaning in it you 2 always do a good job keep doing it "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Allan, Angel: You two should write a play together. This sounded a lot like a the ending of some sort of Shakespeare type tragedy, but only in senryu format. I thought it was quite brilliant! "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh." -- Magus |
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