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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
forethought: judge not the cover of the book, for eventually theyll turn it into a e-book, with no cover but a lot of content. -=nirvana=- taken by the waves crash landed on heaven broken on impact it could never be saved yet it got there it made its trip it arrived at its destination that is all that matters the course brought him closer and closer. he reached eternal grace. he won the race. crash landed on heaven broken on impact it could never be saved, but that was just the vessel anyways. < !signature--> San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... [This message has been edited by Morouxshi San (edited 01-14-2001).] |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
This is a really great as well as strong/powerful poem Keep posting always. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
As always, great peice, I can just see the image you paint soo well, keep it up... Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I'm not sure I quite understand...I'm re-reading it over and over but can't seem to grasp all the content. Oh well, maybe it's just my wittle mind, not yet awake. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
you had me kinda lost until the last line when you said the word 'vessel', I'm guessing the over all statement your trying to make is the spirit is more important than the body? I dunno thats just the way I interprret it. In any case it's a really powerfully worded poem with great imagry >¶Øʆ< |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey felipe, that was great. I thought it was kick butt. Oh and once again, the forethought was cool hehe. Keep them rollin'!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i only know two nirvanas. the one the buddists believe in and nirvana the band. I might be wrong but it fits both.it was an amazing poem Regina |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
thanks for the replies. p.o.a.- you got it, its the spirit is the one that matters. Ina- you couldnt be more right.  San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Really good poem! I was thinking along the same lines as Regina, I wasn't sure which Nirvana you were talking about but it fit them both. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I know a third thing called nirvana, it's a town in michigan but it's pronounced differently. Anyway, I actually understood this poem, nice job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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