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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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Here's a poem... sort of... I have alot of things (good things) going on in my life right now and I feel I'm loseing a grip. I know it will pass but basicly that is why I haven't been able to write or visit this place very often lately and that is also why this poem is not so good *COUsucksGH*... but enjoy it for what it is worth. Over Whelmed (for lack of a good title) brain is fried fuse is short pressure building no support sleep comes last not counting friends work and school even weekends day by day I waste away oh so true yet so cliche To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many is research The early bird may get the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 02-19-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey Isgona! I been missing you! *hugs* haha. Nicely done here. I actually thought the poem was well done. come back to us more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*sigh* and you say that sucks? I'm shaking my head now. It does NOT suck!!! Why? Cause I said, that's why!  Some people. Just don't know good poetry when they write it. It's good as always Jason. "I am Canadian" - Joe "When I find the right guy for me, I'll love him no matter what he does or what he's like" |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
This is an awesome poem! You described it well. Thanks for posting this. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
...Even though u want me to tell you it sucks and why... i can't. :P It's a good poem, for sure.  "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
IsGona: You needn't worry about this sucking. I tought the rhyming was quite well done. BTW, you ought not to be too hard on yourself. In other words, change the wording on that darned Critique flag to something else! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Aww... dopey... *group hug* I still feel like a part of the family. Skyfire ~ you were to kind. but thank you GreenEyes ~ good to hear from you... so very glad you liked it HiddenSparkleZ ~ that was cute... thanks Fractal ~ you are right... I changed it... thanks |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Great rhythm and rhyming scheme IsGona ... nice to see you posting. You've spoken for a few people with these words I would suspect, even me. Some days I feel like this too. Hope things cheer up soon! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
J-man, you KNOW what I'm gonna say. But I'm gonna say it anyway. YOUR POETRY DOESN'T SUCK! Never did, never will. So put a smile on your face, and make the world a better place....haha or not. Just stay you. ~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 02-20-2001).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is a great poem IsGona. I don't have any words of wisdom, I'm going through the same thing. I haven't even been able to come here in a long time. This is my first post in probably a month, and the first poem I read is your's. What a coincidence? Nice poem and good luck! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
We all have times like this when we feel overwhelmed. I hope you have found a way to cope! This poem is wonderful, thank you for sharing it with us!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Yeah....I know about this one!!! I have wwwaaayyyy too much going on right now!!  I Barely have any time to do anything!!  But I don't think this poem sucks...I think its awesome!! Great job, keep it up!!!Much Luv, ~*~S*W*E*E*T*S*T*U*F*F~*~ How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
oops   [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 02-20-2001).] |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thank you, thank you, thank you, and ahhhh thanks. I can't believe all these responses... I feel a little selfish because I have not been around and replying to every one elses... I promise by this weekend I will do a mass reading and replying heheThanks again Jason 'Maybe it's stupid Maybe it's nothing Maybe this something... just wont go away .. I'm not a liar I'm not a sinner I'm just trying... not to get thrown away' FULL DEVIL JACKET [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 02-20-2001).] |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
Sucks? How could you say that it's awesome in many ways.... I love it.... Hope I see more of your writing. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this is great!!!! JUST AWESOME hehehe it dont suck... at all.Valerie *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I just hope you start feeling better. Hang in there buddy.....Everyone goes thru tough times in life. I too am in the same boat, and I'm haning on as hard as I can I'd like to see you do the same thingSo long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Starr, SugarPie, acirE Thank you for your comments. And don't worrie acire, everything is good... infact things are GREAT, I'm just overwhelmed with a major lack of time, but anyhow, thank you again ppl. It's hard to believe every one liked this one though. I still think it stinks, but whatever... you guys are the experts. Jason |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
I hope things get better SOON! And welcome back! GREAT poem.. very well done. Well, I guess I can't say any more than what's already been said. But welcome back, again. Keep posting! *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Hey Jay!! Since you may not be on for a while...I will occupy myself by reading your old stuff...lol I agree with everyone else, I don't think it sucks at all, and I certainly know what it feels like to be overwhelmed. Much love. Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey, just take your time and relax a bit Hope things get better good luck hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I think I got here a little late so yeh umm... This is really great and I can't understand why you don't post more... anyway great read... Zu |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
yeah I can totally relate with this poem, and it's a Chou*goodpoem*gh peace out The rescue in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was good stuff Jason. Hope all will get better dude. Regina |
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Julian L. Chester Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 50 |
i too believe that this poem is good because poetry come with in the person that writes it and i dont think no poem actually sucks and if another person thinks it sucks then that only means that they dont understand the poem. in order for a poem to be good for a person on the outside looking in is only if that person understands so keep coming to this site cause your good and keep your head up high ok. bye now keep writing and dont be afraid to put your poems out there. |
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