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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Hey peeps. It's been a while since I posted, so here's some bitter candy for your surely hungry little eyes......... Through Rose-Colored Glasses D i s a s t e r Is imminent, but continue your ways. Your placid world lives no wasted days. Sweet, haunting words, hide from your ears. Force eyes to ignore your own baby's tears. I n d o l e n c e Is lovely, more attractive than I. Fill your lungs with content as I whimper and sigh. ____________________________________________________ Auntie Laurie Another conversation carried In a whispered hush. Ignorance screaming, never buried By a daughter's blush. Emptiness holds eyeliner hostage. (Lacerated joy) Mutalated bodies are haunting-- Just another toy. ____________________________________________________ Narcolepsy Drop of blood is slowly slipping, Dripping down the scarlet tongue. Ocean eyes are open, haunting Flaunting lyrics never sung. Mind, still waking, faster, thinking Shrinking as the heart must slow. Mother's screams heard through her weeping; Sleeping son must always know. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked these.....I thought that out of the 3 the 1st one was the best. nIcely done here carly. Hope to see more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Wow... it's been a looooong day and my brain is fried, but these poems are amazing as usual. I like the last one the best... I think... I will have to read these again in the morning. Wonderful job as always. you are quite the poetess  <-this guy cracks me up for some reason~Jason To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many is research The early bird may get the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese |
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Maitay Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158Sisters,OR,USA |
I've been gone for a while and never read your poems till now, those are amazing peices. I cant wait to read more... ~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~ ~Maitay Mirabel Litton~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Carly You are simply amazing Your writing is astounding BRAVO!!! So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-20-2001).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
WOW, those were great, I liked the last one the best and the part: "Drop of blood is slowly slipping, Dripping down the scarlet tongue. Ocean eyes are open, haunting Flaunting lyrics never sung." very very kind of you to post 3!  ps- i love your critic message JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Carly! Suffice it to say that you RULE, girl. I had seen the second one earlier, you showed it to me. I think the same of it as I did before. The first one was... ahh... okay. But it was outshone by the other two, in my opinion. The ~LAST~ one was ~PACKED~ with powerful verbs. This made the imagery all that much more impressive, the feelings seem all that much more real. The last one is my favourite for this reason. They are all good, you little poetess you! Keep sharing, girl! *hugs* Talk to you later. -Allan The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood |
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