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Perfect Moment |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
Lost in you I was that night. When everything just seemed so right My heart was filled with pure delight When I held you in my arms so tight As I looked into your eyes I saw they were but a disguise For an angel from the skies Sweetly singing her reprise Ours lips met with such great passion It put the shame the bright, hot sun And then I knew what had begun was two hearts melding into one That night, outside, it was so cool But it did not affect us two For in my heart, I felt so true That perfect moment, shared with you |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
How beautiful!!! I luv it!!! It is sooooo sweet!!! It flows well too. Keep up the awesome work! And keep posting!! Much Luv, ~*~S*W*E*E*T*S*T*U*F*F~*~ How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
nice poem! good luck for u. ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's nice to see that sweetstuff graced us with her presence  Now this poem is perfect as it is. beautiful thanks for sharing So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well I liked this poem.....cept for the word "cool" in it......I think you could have used something better.....a better word. Flaunt that vocabulary..... Uhhhhh.....everything else was fine.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
Well, I do want to clarify on that note, that the usage of "cool" was meant as in the outside temperature was about 40 degrees. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww this was really sweet. it flowed really nicely and had a great meaning. keep posting wonderful pieces like this one *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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shortilove_03 Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 20Arkansas, United States |
Hey, It's the newbie. =) I really liked this poem. It got to me. I liked the part where you said "As I looked into your eyes I saw they were but a disguise For an angel from the skies Sweetly singing her reprise." That was extremely touching. Oh, and thanks for welcoming me! Shortilove_03 |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
I love this poem..... it's beautiful and enchanting....i'give a feeling of passion & love.... Two of my fav topics to write & feel... keep posting  |
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