A friendship lost...a new one gained

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Teen Poetry #4

A friendship lost...a new one gained

pixiechild
Junior Member

since 2001-02-02

Posts 35

0 posted 2001-02-11 12:07 PM

Now it really hurts like mad
but I can't see it as that bad..
telling you the absolute truth
of me making a choice in my youth

Now I realize where we stand
in this already confussing land
It really hurts like mad
but in a way I'm not sad
To admit that our friendship is waving goodbye
and for sure that's no lie

It made me mad
to loose our friendship we had
cause you couldn't accept the choise I made
making it feel like a sharpened blade
going through my heart and soul
my eyes feeling like a burning cole
just because my choise you couldn't accept
and now I lost all my respect

What I told you that day
made our friendship to fade away
The pain is no relieve
and in our friendship I stopped to believe

I found a new friend
that accepts my choice till the end!

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

1 posted 2001-02-11 12:39 PM

this is good. correct some spelling mistakes and it'll be perfect!!

~Valerie~

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

2 posted 2001-02-11 01:07 PM

Ditto. Good poem, yet the errors do detract from the flow of your piece.
I totally understand the pain in losing a friend tho. I have felt it over and over.

Keep your head up.

xoxo
Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-02-11 05:55 PM

sorry to hear that you're loosing a friend
it's never easy
I'm glad that you've found someone else though
thanks for the read
keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-02-12 06:23 PM

Yea it's horrible losing a friend. Nice poem and good luck. Next time try not to post so much in one day hehe.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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