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It Hurts |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
It Hurts It hurts to be in love It hurts to be loved It hurts when your love's not reciprocated It hurts when your friend loves your love too It hurts when a friend's love is withdrawn It hurts when love is the start of a hate It hurts when love makes you lose a friendship It hurts when love creates friction when there was none It hurts when your friend loves someone with the same intensity It hurts to know that you could do something to hurt loved ones It hurts to beg someone to stay It hurts to know you could lose your love one day nOTE : This is about me and a friend. complicated stuff but i really feel bad for her. thing is that i can't do anything about it. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I been through this..........all is fair in love and war. Nice poem here......expressed very well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Your format and repetition really expresses the pain this poem presents. Good job!  "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hmm good poem here, im not clear on the situation but you express alot of pain (and hurt obviously  ) but i hope everything works out for the better, good luck*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I too like the repetitious style it added to the expression of you feelings hope things get settled talk to each other good luck I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I know the feeling. And you expressed it well. Good job. -Allan When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda |
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