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Teen Poetry #4

Without a Light (senryu)

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

0 posted 2001-02-10 01:46 PM

Keep without a light
Scribble behind the shadows
Feed it to the ghosts

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

1 posted 2001-02-10 02:23 PM

what? nice wordage....post more of your long works!!!!

"I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.)

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-02-10 05:21 PM

oh wow!!! very good write AR...keep it up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

3 posted 2001-02-10 05:46 PM

*smiling* Wonderful senryu, Allan!!!! Great vocab. and awsome imagry. Keep up the work, senryu king.

Keep searching, we are here, you only have to find us.~ Amanda

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-02-10 05:54 PM

Nice one here Allan. I've got a warning...don't feed those ghosts too frequently...they'll neva leave you alone...
~Carly

"Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron)

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-02-10 06:33 PM

Silly Carly... you ~are~ one of the ghosts!
Read the poem again. Geez. ~_^

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-02-10 11:14 PM

Nice senryu.......Not yer best in my eyes. I lacked that one that you wrote previously.....Forgot the name....but I went wild over it. I guess my standards just went a bit higher with your senryu writing once I saw how good the other one was. Now I have a base for comparison......hope to see more from you pal.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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