Teen Poetry #4 |
A Shooting Star |
Secsyy lil angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 36Portland Oregon, USA |
I stared out my window and into the night Overhead a shooting star passed Catching me up in its flight I closed my eyes and made a wish..... I wished for someone to love me Someone to care Someone to hold me when I needed them there Someone to cry with Someone who wouldnt lie Someone who would make it ok when I felt as if I could die Someone I could trust Someone who could make me smile Someone that would go that extra mile And then like a dream come true I opened up my eyes and I found you ~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~ *~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This poem was excellent! Simply outstanding!It's funny how one person can mean everything to you, isn't it? I've never read your work before, but I'm glad that you gave me the opportunity. Very well done! -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
BEAUTIFUL!!! I can't believe no one's reading and replying to this poem. Well, you can always count on Allan to read your poem. So as Dopey and Lake. They're just running a little late i guess. Your poem is magnificent. I'm loving it a lot. Thanks for the share I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea sorry I was running a bit late..... Nicely done here. Wonderful love poem here fitting the mood for v-day. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Aww.....how pretty. Me liked it lots. ~Carly "Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron) |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
That was beautiful!! I like!! Lol! Keep up the awesome work!! Much luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Impressive. I think this poem would go well as a song. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
a very sweet poem! wow, I haven't seen anything of yours in FOREVER!! Hope you stick around! ~*~Jesssica~*~ "Tell me why you cry" |
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Secsyy lil angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 36Portland Oregon, USA |
Hey guyz, great to be back again! Its been a long time since i've wrote anything, jus havent felt inspired. Well, i wanted to thank you all for responding to my poem, it meant a lot to me! ~*Kia ~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~ *~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~* |
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Neokrew Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 60VA |
Hey, This is a really good poem i feel the same way about a person well sorta the same way b/c I feel nobody can feel exactaly how another feels. Anyway well writen and I look forward to reading more of your poems. --Neo |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
OMG THIS IS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD!!!!!!!! i am in love with this i am a mushy-lovey-dovey type of gal i guess hehehee GREAT GREAT GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!! i will keep my eye open for your work in the future!! ~*Valerie*~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey! It's a good thing I looked at this one, as acire already promised my reply! (I have been a little bad at replying lately, I could have missed this one!) Now about the poem, though, it's very good, it caught my thoughts at the beginning, sometimes with middles like those I get bored but this one was perfect, and the ended was great! So, it's a really good poem I hope you are inspired and post some more soon "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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