Teen Poetry #4 |
nameless child |
eternal_darkone Junior Member
since 2001-02-07
Posts 14 |
A nameless child wonders alone He tries to find his one true home He wonders through the darkness Because he fears the light The darkness has become his friend It guards him from the words they speak And keeps his pain a bay If he leaves the darkness And wonders to the light He know not what he'll do He sees the others in the light But he dares not to leave He wants to be happy And enter the light But those in the light Keep him in the dark |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this poem.......as if he's eternally shunned away from what he desires.....nicely done here. Welcome to Passions! I hope to see more from you! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ohhhh great first post. Me like lotses....Can't wait to see more! ~Carly "Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron) |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
nice poem keep writing |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I love it! Honestly, because I can understand it. Your style seems to be very intriguing. I look forward to reading more of your work. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a wonderful first post, examining the many things that can keep us from the light. I hope you can get into the light someday. Thanks for sharing PS-check your e-mail "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very sad and emotional piece here. Welcome to Passions! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Welcome to Passions? Amazing first post I love these lines "He wants to be happy And enter the light But those in the light Keep him in the dark" I'm glad you've decided to join and I do hope to see you in here more I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was an amazing first post!! I hope you like it here and welcome!!! |
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Neokrew Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 60VA |
hey, Welcome to netpoets you will love it here its great. Anyways I liked your poem it was really good and I hope to see more of your work. --Neo |
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