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A Thousand Words |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Yearning Burning Twisting Turning All when im around you Teez me Squeeze me Love me Need me Everything i want you to do Hugs Kisses Letters Misses Feel how i feel for you Want me Cherish me Hold me Intrigue me Your actions determine so much about you... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely written......It's a feel good poem. Something a bit dif. from you. Last time I read you, you were all sad about feeling emotions about a guy. Anyway nicely done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
i really liked this! i liked the style you used it works really well. keep it up. ~kate~ |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I loved this! Keep it up |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This was really good. I loved the flow!! Keep 'em coming!  xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
oh, this is really good i love the way it was simply written simple but the last lines carry the whole stanza great job I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow... this one really got to me... I like the format you used in it. Great job. Keep up the good work! -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im glad all of you liked this!! Thanks for taking the time to read it :* |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
I find this format kind of broken but it works. It creates a nice form but it leaves out a lot of words that you might need. But I enjoyed it a lot, thanks... Jeremy "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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the day i tried to live Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 27the seventh circle |
interesting... i understand your sentiments, but only on a surface level... would love to see a deeper exploration of the themes presented herein |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Yeah..a totally different approach. Its nice to see you writing different things. I loved it as always  Keep writin grl*kiley ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thanks everyone!! Yea this is kinda a different style for me but it just came to me and i went with it...Thanks for your replies! |
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