Teen Poetry #4 |
What You Are |
Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
The last few weeks Have been the best in my life Spending time together And having a laugh I love being with you When were alone together Sharing all our deep secrets That we will keep forever You've got the prettiest face That shines wherever you go Stands out in a crowd Like a silk ribbon bow Your voice sings to me like the birds in the morning Your blonde hair stands prettier Than the sun in the dawning You're a bubbly person, Clever and smart Fate put us together To not be apart You're the quench for my thirst The red Rose for my love You're voice, ever so sweet Like the coos from a dove |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Heart=Life, Wonderful first post! The imagry in your poem is just fantastic, I love it so much! You truely showed us all the power of love, as well as what love is. I can not wait to see more work from you soon. And also, Welcome to passions!!!!! I know you will fit right in, and everyone here is very nice. We trully are "friends within a family" and i would just like to say; i am very glaid you joined our little family here at passions. ~Amanda~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a beautiful first post. You describe the way you see you loved one with perfection. I hope to see more of your work around here soon! PS-check your e-mail! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
Thanks Amanda,and Lovebug for the nicely done greeting card, it were brill XXXXX |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Lovely first post I see that you are very satisfied with life right now This girl must really be very special and deserving of such a sweet poem thanks for deciding to join us keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Absolutely lovely poem. She is a very lucky lady. Welcome to Passions. Hope you enjoy your stay. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
Sweet poem! i luvd it! what a lucky girl - make sure you give the poem to her, she'll luv it!!!! Luv Jo xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Well I don't think I could critique this poem. I thought it was well written. Nice one! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
great poem! it's so sweet. ~kate~ |
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Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
Thanks for your insight everyone!!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Welcome to Passions Welcome to passions, I liked this first post of yours, I hope you stay around "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 02-05-2001).] |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Welcome!!! Great Job, You really like him/ her. So... keep posting, and we'll keep reading. Once again great job. c-ya!!! ~Catherine |
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