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You caught my eye
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You caught my eye |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
You caught my eye I was walking with my friends when I passed you by Something about you just seemed to catch my eye Our eyes locked on each other as I kept on walking But I kept going and continued talking Our eyes never left each other as I turned away I never came over, I had nothing to say You looked so lonley sitting there alone I wish I had talked to you so my feelings could be known But instead I continued to walk away Because I couldn't think of not one thing to say Now that I look back on our akward moment There are plenty messages I know I could of sent I could of asked how your day had been or told you I had seen someone who could of been you twin Even better-I could of said "I've been praying for you" And I want you to know God's watching over you too But intead I just kept walking on by Never saying a word not even giving it a try So next time I see you sitting there, I'll know what to say I'll come over and say "hey, how was your day?" I hope that you'll catch my eye again sometime Because until then you'll continue to be on my mind |
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the day i tried to live Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 27the seventh circle |
always the lover, never the beloved *sigh* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
A nice poem. It is a touchy issue for me though... I'm often passed by by people who wish to console me for what I seem to be thinking or what I believe. I love being a loner though. I used to dread being seen alone, now I actually like it. So this guy might like to talk to you, might not. Just be careful that you don't offend him with religious references. Best of luck to you. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice poem here! I liked the descriptive little narration of what happened. A little story in this poem. I liked it.....good job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
This is about my friend who has just started back school due to a six month hospitaliztion(sp?) period. I saw him sitting over by himself and I didn't say anything. So thats what the poem is about. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wonderful poem, i love the topic too everything flowed really nice next time, do make sure you talk to him i believe he'd appreciate that thanks for the read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I really enjoyed this poem. Is this based on a real-life experince? |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This was really sad. I hate regret. Can't change the past, just try and remake the future! xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
It sounded like a love poem but it soon grew into a poem of sincerity. Sometimes words are hard to divulge in awkward momments. You only get a few chances so try your best to comfort this person escpecially considering that they are in a state of abuse. Keep in touch! Jeremy "zzzIzzzAMzzzJEREMYDRAULzzz" |
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