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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
I can still feel what it was lingering beneath my skin burned all the fire succumb defeat it all disappears when i try to reach In, around, and through my planes everything is lost back at the beginning the sweet taste of what was to be, rotting and cleansing from within me. such perfect pretty crevices, cutting deep into my hands such a perfect mapped out thought I remember sometimes how deep can you go? how strong can you be? How much will it take to destroy me? I can wash it all away carried by dispassionate tides follow me down the drain to my decaying apathetic inside What a beautiful dilatory decline in this vacant sullen existence i fell apart yesterday but live to today I remember now i can't erase what i've heard or what you've said it's all in place now... Knowing in some remote night when shadows could whisper in my ear I would be washed away (but nothing would be so near) pull me closer to what could and would and won't exist in some deceitful dream...somewhere in the back i taste the demise of another life find me in another way run away to another place find me in this dilusion, where i've been waiting for my deseased self-conclusion "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" [This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 02-03-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh my... this poem absolutely amazed me... it put me in a trance the first time I read it, so I'm going to read it again. Ohhh man... hehehe... yup, this is the best poem I've read in awhile. Excellent. The word usage, and how you described everything, simply amazing. I really can't say much more than that! Amazing! -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
come on now...i reply so much except for allen! thanks allen your opinion really means a lot. "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
sorry but i really like this one and just want to be read heh..bump..just an excuse to get it up there "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
first of all, if you noticed, you can't bump your own poems anymore  The poem is very interesting Truthfully, I'm a little lost Can you kinda explain this to me a bit much appreciated I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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the day i tried to live Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 27the seventh circle |
i like this piece... have you ever seen the film American Beauty? sorta reminds me of that work... i suppose we all have a little darkness in us... myself being no exception... you might want to use a spell-checker though... some of the misspelled words were close enough to other possible word choices to be somewhat confusing... |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
hey acire i guess i'll give a small explanation..heh not up for a big one.. basically it is about losing your passion for something you love..you don't really feel alive without the passion within you "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yeah. I know how it is. I used to have this huge thing about happiness. Lost that passion. Hellooo apathy! Welcome, care to stay a while? Amazing, anomaly. You amaze me past any point of possible comprehension. ~Susanna "Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron) |
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