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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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I keep seeing this word list poem thing going on... so I might as well try it. Here goes.... tell me if you like it: Renewal Smile Wonder Happiness Changing Different Friendship none Friendly Distant Alarming Changing Covering Shielding Lying Concealing Painful Friendship no more "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
nice word list. keep writing.  |
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MidnightMaverick Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35Duluth, MN, USA |
I use this style of writing often. It helps bring together a scattered thought. I enjoyed your word list. Keep up the good work. -Maverick |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here. I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Woo-hoo! It's catching on! You did a great job on this, Jenn. Did you consider it to be easy or difficult? I'd like to know. -Allan Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
seems like everyone is doing this style now. I think you did one really good job on this one. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Whoa! I like it. You've done a good job making a poem that expresses something that is greater than the sum of the poem's parts. Good work here. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks all. I found this style of poetry unique. Difficult? Not really. I had a situation in particular I was thinking of when I wrote this, so it was kinda easy. Impacting words that made sense to me just kind of flowed. Thanks again!! xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is a very unique form but i like it a lot!!! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thank you sugar high!! Means a lot.  xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
When ever I read these types of poems, I try to figure out what state of mind the person was in and what they were thinking about when they wrote it. Then when you read it again it means so much more. I get the feeling this poem is fairly obviously about a friendship. Now to go any deeper is just assumptions on my part, but I'm going to take a stab at it. It starts off: Renewal Smile Wonder Happiness Which sounds like the beginning of a good friend ship. Then it starts to change a little and then the word none... The friendship is over. The rest of the poem is about why it ended and then again you reinforce the friend ship is "no more." I think the word "changing" which you used twice really conveys that it was out of your hands, that things just changed and you don't have an explanation for it... and it was certainly not what you expected.. Well that's what I got out of it... I'm prolly way off but it was very interesting to read Thx ~Jason To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many is research The early bird may get the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 02-03-2001).] |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Well Jason, You couldn't have got too much closer to the real deal. I was really in an unhappy place before I met my friend, hence "renewal"... it was really good, until things started changing. We grew apart, and it went back and forth. But now it's just a total mess, she never talks to me, when we do we fight.  Now it's basically over... I guess that's pretty much it. Thanks for reading. xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*bump*page one words,words,words!!... ahhhhhh  hehe...just kiddin'  but.. i really thought this was creative nice job on the poem..  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-30-2001).] |
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