Teen Poetry #4 |
smiple thoughts |
jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
Drifting here within this sea of glory, I look aroun and say "man this is boring", Same actions of life day until day, But that is just the way things are and they will always stay, Float with me inside this sea of truth, Just to wake up and fall of the roof, Sleeping I was to this very day, Simple thoughts keep me this way, Do not hide and endure all this power, Because you a corrupted every minute and ever hour, I stand alone because I am afaird, I hate that day to day, Feeling empty and all alone, It is living my daily life inside my own little zone, No one can see what I keep hidden inside, Because whne someone tries I run far as I do wide, So I live you with these simple thoughts, To help the sick the enduring and lost, Pull them ot of there little shell, Teach them to be strong through your actions and what you tell, For a single man should tell a lie they shall turn there back and say goodbye. Don't let time pass you bye Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was really good. I liked what you said at the end........"don't let time pass you by"........I like that saying a lot. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Interesting poem. I liked your little graphic!! xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Hey buddie! I really like this.. You must be picking up on my brain waves b/c I have been trying to write something like this all day. WAY TO GO! lots of love, Malinda |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
words of wisdom this poem is written really good i love your style that includes narration great work keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
I guess you can forgive me green eyes for beating you to the punch I am glad everyone liked it. Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
hey this is really beautiful.. your words just strike something in me..a very wise post. great job! "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one a lot. The flow of it's great and it's written really well. nice job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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