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CLBinLOVE
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0 posted 2001-06-20 09:12 PM


the touch of a mother
a prodding hand on mine,
trying to guide the steeringwheel
dry, scratchy, annoying

the touch of a father
on the shoulder, to add emphasis
while lecturing me
warm, heavy, oppressive

the touch of a little sister
a fast tap on the arm
trying in vain to tell me something i already know
quick, hyper, demanding attention

the touch of a good friend
a short jab to the arm in play,
for something i always say
light, solid, dependable

the touch of a girlfriend
a caress across the cheek
a light touch to show love
smooth, soft, sending tingles down my spine

~this is pretty self explanitory, thought of it while driving, and my mom kept tellin me what to do, while i was driving fine, the rest just fit in.

i am blinded by the silence of a breaking heart... i cant see myself

© Copyright 2001 Craig Baker - All Rights Reserved
Isabel Galaxia
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1 posted 2001-06-20 09:51 PM



Good poem.
But you have me in a very bad mood now. I said thursday  
Bel

stace_co2003
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2 posted 2001-06-20 10:05 PM


this is a really cute poem. I like it alot!!!!  

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

ethel lahootie
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3 posted 2001-06-20 11:20 PM


i liked this...descriptive...good job
obscurity of cloud
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4 posted 2001-06-21 01:01 AM


your format is very nicely set up.  Great job!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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5 posted 2001-06-21 02:13 AM


nice job on teh poem...very self explanatory ...enjoyed the read...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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6 posted 2001-06-21 03:27 PM


This is very good.  I REALLY enjoyed this.  The format you used, and the way you described the contrasts in relationships.. very cool.  Awesome work..

--Marie

"Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising... so this old world must still be spinning 'round. And I still love you." -James

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7 posted 2001-06-22 03:13 AM


I enjoyed this a lot! very well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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