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Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

0 posted 2001-06-20 02:54 AM

Eyes lock
Smiles start
Hellos exchanged
Strangers meet

Taste of heaven
Total bliss
So much courage
For that first kiss

Warm embrace
Feeling safe
Hand in hand
Life goes on just as planned

Complete happiness
Utter joy
On top of the world
Is where you stand

The first lie
Love begins to die
Tear after tear
The heart hides in fear

His hand pulls away
He decides not to stay
The heart breaks
The body aches

Lonliness and pain
Are now your game
You begin to wonder
Will life ever be the same

You will be fine
Just take some time
No more falling in love
Its just not needed

Smile at the sky
Walk with you head held high
Stroll along the block
You glance up...

And eyes lock................

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

1 posted 2001-06-20 07:45 AM

I like this poem, it's really cute. and it shows the cycle very clearly, lol.

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

2 posted 2001-06-20 09:14 AM

Hey,

cycle's are bad this one

The poem was superb though, the re-hyming ( I ment to say that ) Just wonderful! Until your next poem

-- Linc

       "Blood Moon"
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the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

3 posted 2001-06-20 09:21 AM

I think that was good and the cycle is oh so true lol .

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

Raven Skye
Member

since 2001-03-03

Posts 112
.In a House.

4 posted 2001-06-20 09:51 AM

I liked this very much and it's so very true about the cycle. I give this poem a thumbs up!!

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
"Can't explain the way that I feel. You are the love I never found." -Cold

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-06-20 12:09 PM

I really liked this one. I can relate to this one so well. I loved the ending... the way you put the poem into a cycle was awesome. This is a very impressive poem. I enjoyed it quite a bit. Nice work.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2001-06-20 06:31 PM

I like this muches. The ending was really cool how it brought it back around.

Jenn

"If my heart had wings, I would fly to you and lie.. beside you as you dream, if my heart had wings." Faith Hill

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-06-22 02:33 AM

I enjoyed the poem here Shy. Very well expressed. I thought you did awesome.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

8 posted 2001-06-22 02:35 AM

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwws this poem is cute!!!!
robin

Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

9 posted 2001-06-29 07:37 PM

What a wonderful poem nik. Hope you share your next one with me.

*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*

*Everyone can deal with pain in their own way, some things are just harder than others!*

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

10 posted 2001-06-30 02:01 PM

wow. this was absolutly wonderful. i loved it. nice job

fall hard, practice harder not to fall
Don't belong, Don't exist, Don't give a S***, Don't ever judge me -Slipknot

AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

11 posted 2001-07-01 02:09 PM

love it!

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

12 posted 2001-07-01 10:23 PM

expressed soo well...i liked this poem a LOT...enjoyed the read

...hope to see more...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

13 posted 2001-07-02 09:57 PM

Oh man! Nikki! I LOVE this! In the library it goes. (Yes! I have one now! hahaha)
I dont know what it is about this, but I'm just totally feeling it. The rhyming is great! Keep posting.

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