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trying tribute to e. e. cummings (200th post)
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trying tribute to e. e. cummings (200th post) |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
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i dreamt of dreamers dreaming spin the spun and spanned the globe trip a tight rope robbing trill enjoy your ever flimflam flow "sleep wake hope and then" call the callers number blind moan the mournful mourning's morn slide the slidden, breathe the brethren can you feel the heartfelt pounding pining at your windowsill? please the pass the table turns turning life like lulling love "sun moon stars rain" mix of many may melodrama mud mercy on the stones of strife beams down eternal and smiles my soul "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wowers.. I'm very impressed. I read this through once, and read it again, only aloud. It sounded so cool. Your use of alliteration really worked for the flow. Awesome work. I enjoyed this a LOT. --Marie "Imagine a pageant... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Now this....is my...kind of poetry.... awesome....simply greatness. Library, of course.....  ~Carly "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..." |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!!!...i loved this piece...you written this with soo much beauty...amazing job!...hope to see more soon...and im glad to see you post again  ...also itw as agreat tribute..  ...ohh and CONGRATS on the 200!!!...sorry i keep forgetting to say stuff..  ...bye  [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-20-2001).] |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
this is really really cute!!!!!!!! Love it Love it Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
i don't know if this made sense to any of you, but thanks for responding! I'm still working on the sense part of it.... "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
awesome poem! congrats on the big 200!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
AHHHHHHH!!!!!!! E.E. Cummings ROCKS! I love him! You did so well on this one. I loved it so much. VERY VERY VERY awesome job! Great post for your milestone post count. GOodjob here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
All I can say is "OOOOHHHHH!!!" This tickled my funnybone! I love those alliterations you use so humourously here! ESPECIALLY "enjoy your ever flimflam flow" Great job!  "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Superb! I enjoyed this greatly. You really know how to work with consonance, and that's extremely evident in this poem. Beautifully crafted. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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