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Teen Poetry #4
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ethel lahootie
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0 posted 2001-06-19 09:33 PM

i dunno if i posted this already...i dont think i did....but im sometimes a lil forgetful sorry u guys if i did!!!


There is noise all around
Music, and people chattering
But my focus is on you
Only you
I watch you dance
I watch you play
A simple smile comes across my face
I laugh out loud
I know you don’t notice me
Over in the dark corner
Something’s changed between us
You act like I’m not here
Yet for some reason I smile
© Copyright 2001 ethel lahootie - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-19 09:48 PM

Wow, ethel.  I really liked this one.  It reminded me of something I'm going through right now.  Very familiar... I enjoyed this.  The ending was very powerful, and after reading the poem through numerous times, it still left me with chills with each read.  Very nice work, here.  Enjoyed, as always.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair
ethel lahootie
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2 posted 2001-06-19 10:50 PM

thanks for replying...yeah i think im still going through this one...haha newayz thanks again
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3 posted 2001-06-20 12:29 PM

i too...really liked the ending...great job!...i enjoyed this ...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?
ethel lahootie
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4 posted 2001-06-20 01:18 PM

gracias
-ethel
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5 posted 2001-06-22 02:28 AM

Awwwww......i loved the ending to this one. I really liked this poem a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
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6 posted 2001-06-22 02:37 AM

you go girl! even though he may be a jerk just smile and slap that's my philosiphy.
robin
  

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!
ethel lahootie
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7 posted 2001-06-22 12:14 PM

thanks dopey!!
robin...i totally agree!!!
thanks u guys
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