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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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0 posted 2001-06-17 05:24 PM

The Legend of the Dragon.

In lands of Once Upon a time,
A long long time ago,
A pauper lived in dirt and grime,
On a mountain topped with snow,
Underneath the pale blue skies,
And meadows of fresh green,
Where dragons were like flies,
And you lived till age eighteen,

A Princess in a golden gown,
Was taken from her throne,
A dragon flew into the town,
And took her from her home,
Days turned to darkness,
As the king sent out his knights,
But they all failed to impress,
But ended burning bright,

Came the pauper through the Castle,
On a donkey old and grey,
The King said it wasn’t worth the hassle,
And that he couldn’t pay,
But the pauper did his duty,
And tracked the mighty beast,
He had fallen for her beauty,
His common sense had ceased,

With a slingshot in his hand,
And love deep in his heart,
Everything was planned,
He’d tear the beast apart,
He crept on up behind,
And threw a stone at him,
Made the dragon blind,
But his chances were still slim,

The dragon cried a mighty roar,
And flapped his mighty wings,
A gust of wind had let him soar,
Above the weakling kings
The dragon drew a mighty breath,
And he blew a fiery flame,
The pauper met his death,
Devoid of any fame,

The dragon was quite hungry,
So he had a barbecue,
He ate up all the peasantry,
And fed the Princess till she grew,
The Princess grew up very tall,
Like every dragon should,
They married in the great hall,
And lived in the Deep Wood.

--- Ok well I just felt I had to write something...

"Death solves all problems, no man, no problem" J.V.Stalin 1918.

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

1 posted 2001-06-17 07:12 PM

Hehe... not your typical story, but you still do a great job of storytelling with this piece! Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

2 posted 2001-06-17 08:59 PM

*reads Zu's constructive critique message* okay well i cna't think of anything where you could improve because simply put i love it! LOL i'm a sucker for story's-in-poems.... hahaha

good job!!!

Valerie

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-17 09:00 PM

This was a mix between Shrek and David&Goliath. I liked this one and it was good......well done here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Yezea, your Angel
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since 2001-06-08

Posts 11
Canada

4 posted 2001-06-17 09:05 PM

Really like it, story in poem form.. really great job .
Always like Princess story

Yezea

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since 2001-04-24

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land of cheese (Wisconsin)

5 posted 2001-06-18 04:45 AM

lol i was reading it expecting some sort of fairy tale happy ending, but you surprised me with killing off the pauper. kool poem, thanks for the read.
-fear-

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

6 posted 2001-06-18 08:53 PM

awwww, Zu, what a lovely poem!!! I love it!! I wanna see more like this....you do a great job at this. mhm...don't you forget it either

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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