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Hallucination
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0 posted 2001-06-17 04:21 PM


She’s in my dreams
She’s on my mind,
And every time,
I open a beauty magazine,
She’s on page seventeen.
She’s wondering in my heart
24 – 7 – 365.
She’s taking a ride. Inside my heart.
What can I do,
Can’t hold back these,
Feelings pushing trough.

I feel so wired,
When ever I see Britney Spears.
My stomach turns upside down,
And my heart won’t get back on the ground.
I have to catch my breath again.

She’s in my heart
She’s in my soul,
Ready to blow,
My mind to another place,
She’s always in my head.
She’s reflecting in my eyes,
3 am. I feel her light.
She’s taking a ride, Inside my eyes.
What can I do,
Can’t hold back these,
Feelings pushing through.

I feel so wired,
When ever I see Britney Spears.
My stomach turns upside down,
And my heart won’t get back on the ground.
I have to catch my breath again.

Her eyes are clearer than the water next to me
Her love are cleaner than the air I breathe,
She’s Everything missing in me.
What can I do,
Can’t hold back these,
Feelings pushing through.

I feel so wired,
When ever I see Britney Spears.
My stomach turns upside down,
And my heart won’t get back on the ground.
I have to catch my breath again.


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Linc
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1 posted 2001-06-17 06:16 PM


Hey,

    ummm...errr...well...Hallucination I think its okay not your close to your best but good either way. Keep it *ponders Britney Spears*

            -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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the wonderful land of oz
2 posted 2001-06-17 06:24 PM


do you really feel this way about brittney?

if so, i'm truly sorry.

but it was alright poem.

kind of cool.

i do like your other stuff better though.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen.  - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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3 posted 2001-06-17 06:58 PM


It does suck to be smitten with a celeberty... I've fallen for lots of famous guys (one male harmony group especally!). Anyway, you describe your feelings well, although I am not a Britney fan. Thanks for sharing.  

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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4 posted 2001-06-17 07:05 PM


Britney definitely is a beautiful girl.  I don't blame you for liking her.  I've seen her 3 times already and I'd love to see her more times  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

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5 posted 2001-06-17 08:52 PM


Hehehehe!!  
Bit of a confession to make- when I see Britney Spears, I think of one of three things, 1- is too mean for me to mention, 2- Oh God is my boyfriend looking at her?, 3- why can't I be that skinny???
LOL!
Well written tho...

Bel

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6 posted 2001-06-17 09:19 PM


I gotta hand it to her....Britney Spears is extremely beautiful.
Anyhow.....not yer best but nicely done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fearing-laughter
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7 posted 2001-06-18 12:19 PM


hmm...i've never really felt that way about a celebrity.  have i missed the curse? i don't really like britney spears all that much, but your poem was still interesting. thanks for the read.
-fear-

Ina
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8 posted 2001-06-18 12:09 PM


o man....not your b est
MoeRocko
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9 posted 2001-06-18 01:47 PM


Britney Spears: Will strip for Pepsi!
I'm sorry to hear that you're obsessed with such a little whore. Nice post though.....

If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care...  ~John Lennon
  

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10 posted 2001-06-18 02:51 PM


umm...are you serious? ...but yea...she is a beautiful girl ...though it must be hard for you...i liked how you expressed yoruself in this...well...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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Lurking
11 posted 2001-06-18 04:53 PM


I really liked this but I'm not so sure about Britney Spears but great work anyway.  
Zu

the_rescue
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12 posted 2001-06-18 05:26 PM


nice poem can I write my version now

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

*ChrisLover*
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erie, colo
13 posted 2001-06-18 07:01 PM


well...... alot of ppl worte not your best, but i havent read any of yours yet and i might have to agree i hope you can write better. you are one hell of an obsessed fella!! but maybe it will pass... hopefully ....
janette.
write some more id liek to read those ones....

Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care!

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