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little_krazy_poet
Junior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 41

0 posted 2001-06-16 04:00 AM

i do have
a broken hart
in pices has
been pulled apart

this has happened
over the years
with much sorrow
and bloddy tears

it’s been
spread around
thrown on the ground
all over thins town

I can’t find it
it’s all over the place
unknown to me
it’s also out in space

it’s been cursed at
and also been mugged
but there are times when it’s
been cuddled and hugged

I'm trying to bring it
back together
to give it to someone
who’s love will endeavor

to someone
how will be with me
so are love will blossom
into infinity

i wrote this one a while ago i really can't remember where it came from... well hope you like it

WRITE WHAT YOU FEEL!! AND DON’T LET ANYONE TELL YOU TO DO OTHERWISE

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

1 posted 2001-06-16 11:46 AM

watch the spelling. a lot of misspelled words... it would help the flow a lot of u watched those. also the syllables... keep them about the same. other then those 2 things i think the overall jist is great. i can relate

Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

Nicholas
Junior Member

since 2001-06-08

Posts 20
Washington , U.S

2 posted 2001-06-16 11:47 AM

I really liked this poem, great job hope to see more.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-16 02:18 PM

quite the emotional poem...i enjoyed the read

...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-06-16 03:28 PM

The emotions in the poem are like... wow. I like this piece very much. It's nicely written... nice work. I enjoyed the read a LOT.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection. Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-06-17 02:22 AM

I enjoyed this one.....I hope things get better for you and yer broken heart, but from what I read from yer first kiss poem they are.....so that's good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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