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Sorry for this crap.
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Sorry for this crap. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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no more need for this... I'm humiliated at this feeble attempt. I apoligize. [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-12-2001).] |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Allan that is soo beautiful, the words are just soo imaginable if you know what I mean, I have a vibrant image of metal hinges rusting and lips as cold as steel... this is soo wonderful, you have a great talent, keep up the great work... Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You do have a very imaginative mind But to tell you the truth, I'm half way in the dark here I can't seem to understand why you describe yourself as metal, or some kind of robot I'd appreciate a little explanation, so i can read the poem again, and put more sense into it I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Allan, I'm going to have to agree that this is not up to what I'm used to seeing, however, this was extremely creative. I liked the overall theme....good job on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
even though its not the same, at least you tried something new! very unique.. give us some hints on this one plz. ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I guess this one just didn't do anything for me. I hope you don't mind me saying that. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
it was very differnt. but good job anyway. but hey its just me..the little one. well g2g Regina |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, the only reason I posted this one was to make sure that you aren't my mindless "yes" men telling me that everything I do is good. Mission accomplished, I feel better about myself. I'm not posting any more of this crap, sleep easy. ~_^ -Allan |
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