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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
in the night through the dark close your eyes before you see me wake i see your thoughts lying naked on the ground trying to grab at me while i walk away in a frightened daze don't lock me up or let me go i can feed you or at least i'll try pick at my crumbling skin and tell me i am beautiful (but only in a dream) where is the backdoor to your lair? i'm becoming a horrid scare i wear this mask to hide from you and everything if only i could escape... i would-- but everything is gone and my adore has washed away you heard me pass the door you feel it in the air my pitiful notes can comfort your rotting desire and feed to your own sinking stinking oblivion but only love me if you know my name i'm seeping disease because of you in the end i always lose and.. i try to hide but this disintigrating lust is pulling and scraping and screaming and dying to keep me tied down to your inside i wear this mask to hide from you and everything if only i could escape... i would-- but everything is gone and my adore has washed away "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
WOW!!!*Speechless* This poem really made me shake with fear and everlasting fright. Wonderfully done, and I do hope this poem is not based on true life. If so, and you need someone to talk to I am here for you as we all are I am sure. Just e-mail me if you are even in need for we truly are "friends within a family" And are always there for one another. ~Amanda~ What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this simplistic form, yet complicated meaning really intrigued me the whole mask thing was pure brilliance sometimes i wish i could hide from someone so i wouldnt have to face them i guess we all want an easy way out... i really loved this one, reall meant a lot to me to read these words thanks ~JDR |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
wow thanks guys!..and amanda if i ever feel the need to talk i will remember your offer.thank you..ok thanks again to both of you "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was really good anomaly. I liked it a lot. You put a lot of power into this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this supports my opinion about teen#4 i've noticed recently that the quality of poems has gotten much better you've outdone yourself with this one much appreciated narration I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
thanks acire!!!...didn't expect that... "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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