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A Dialog |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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Ok I don't even know why I'm posting this, but maybe someone will find it interesting Let me explain what this is. Last night, I was feeling a little funny, going a little crazy. Kinda like I had a different view on life. An out of body experience perhaps. So I got this idea to sit down, free my mind and simply write down my thoughts... this is what came out of it. Note in some parts I try to rhyme but it really doesn't work, but I didn't want to change anything because that would defeat the purpose of what I was doing. So here it is ~A Dialog~ ...Ok I'm here So... what? What? Tell me things Like what? My self-conscience. Read it to me. Are you sure? No To late Michelle, you don't love her You think you do, but you are wrong Your dad, you still hate him This anger... it is here, not gone Stop. Who are you anyhow? ... Answer me!!! You know who I am I was wrong I don't want to know Well tell me what YOU think Ok Michelle, I need her in my life She is the one My dad, I have forgiven him That is done Naive Happy Naive Go away [edit] I don't need you any more Fine ---------- Well after I wrote this I was pretty freaked out, and I still don't really know where it came from. I think it's quite interesting though. < !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-28-2001).] |
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~*Buffy Summers*~ Junior Member
since 2000-11-30
Posts 24Avondale,AZ,USA |
LOL... Thats Funny... But weird. I can get way crazy like that. Sometimes I'LL just stare at the floor and tears will roll down my face. I have no idea why... Like I'LL be sitting next to my friends and want to talk with them about death and if there scared to die.. But Im like no I dont wanna talk with them about this. I don't want them to know how deep my conversations can be about on life and death and god and the devil so I keep it inside.... Kim Rayann |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey Jason. Going nuts is fun sometimes, isn't it? But so incredibly painful, too..Well anyways, the poem was pretty cool...I hope the voices listened to my advice... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
that was very weird bro i like to see that kinda stuff the style really captured the feelings expressed, scattered and not in it's regular body nice one ~JDR "Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
IsGona, I absolutely LOVED this. Very good very very very good. I didn't think it was funny or weird. I've done it myself. Mine are a bit crazier...... What I'd do is write something like (and in parenthesis have what i'd be thinkin)....like you know how when you write in an essay or read a boring book you tend to drift away (car)....well in parenthesis i'd write what came to mind without forcing anything (smurf) to come to mind at all. Just random things, whether they (superbowl) be incoherent or not. So it's like (two) you're getting two different thoughts, one LONG elaborate essay and little portions (pizza) of other little thoughts. Anyway nice one here!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Buffy ~ I think this IS a little wierd. Seeing how I have no idea where this came from. It's almost like I didn't write it, but thanks for your reply. Carly ~ Going "nutz" is the best. The world of insanity holds all our secrets I know it, but it's only fun to visit. If you stay to long the munchkins and purple turtles in boxer shorts will drag you down... hehe  JDR ~ Thank you. I'm so glad some ppl enjoyed this... That is great. Dopey ~ Wow thanks very much very very VERY much... hehe. Really though I'm glad you liked it. When I posted this I was thinking about your posts a while ago where you said you were just sitting observing ppl and wrote the down every word that popped into your head. I thought those were great. Thanks again every one. ~Jason< !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-29-2001).] |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oh, Jason, do I totally know what you mean here!! I understand you completely. And it's not crazy.... besides "we all go a little mad sometimes."  Good job!! xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey, i think everyone does that We try to talk to ourselves and fiugre things out thanks for sharing your thoughts I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
yes, creative, very good job here jason. Sometimes I feel the same way about my writing, I don't know where it came from. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thank ya, Jenn ~ it's good to know ppl can relate. thx acirE ~Yes I think we do too. Good point. Lake ~ I hear ya. Thx for the reply ~Jason To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many is research The early bird may get the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese |
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