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cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........

0 posted 2001-06-13 02:22 AM


hey guys..i know that this is a poem..but i never really wanted to post it up...cuz its so juvinlie..BUT..this is the way i view ppl sumtimes...i dont know..im crazy you guys know that...but dont you ever notice sum ppl glowing sumtimes?...ah well i do...especially at night...call me insane but hey...i tried didnt i?    


My mark has been left on you
    My print will forever remain
    Until you die
    Until you forget you've been printed

    It glows, It stings, It may even
    Feel like love

    I move about and print many people
    Sometimes it's like a hunge fingerprint
    Or a little blemish
    Or a scar.

    In neon yellow or green-maybe even purple
    Glowing like a glowstick
    Stinging because it hurts
    Alive because it's love.

    Sometimes it washes off with water
    Others with a light rub.
    Others by sheer will power
    Some will scrub at it till
    Skin grows red and raw.

    But it wont go away
    Beacause its cut too deep
    It's in their blood.
    In their life.

    They are inwardly ugly.
    I dont need but want their print.

    Others thrive on it
    Wanting to be covered in my print.
    Till they're bright shining becons of
    MY life.
    Covered in my fingerprints
    Like i am covered in theirs.

    My print has been left on your hand
    But has travelled to your heart.
    I see it in your smile
    And there it glows.

[This message has been edited by cherish (edited 06-14-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 cherish - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-13 09:48 AM


They're probably gonna move this to the teen poetry forum.  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

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2 posted 2001-06-13 11:14 AM


Not if we add lots of stuff to it...
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3 posted 2001-06-13 11:50 AM


Acire's right, my friend. To teen it goes...

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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4 posted 2001-06-13 01:23 PM


I guess this is in Teen then... Great work Cherish   I really enjoyed the read...
Zu

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5 posted 2001-06-13 11:58 PM


this poem...esp the ending gave me a nice feeling maybe the way your emotions were written...great poem ...hope to see more from you...bye "crazy" cherish

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6 posted 2001-06-16 05:50 PM


Cherish you ARE crazy for thinking this poem sucks. I can't believe you! This poem had a lot of true feeling in it. It rocked, very nicely done!!
I loved it!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
7 posted 2001-06-18 12:57 PM


....this is one of the worse things ive written...let it sink!..*hides under the console*
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8 posted 2001-08-06 12:49 PM


LOL-there goes the insane CHERISH again- I swear, if you go near-NO if you even THINK about drinking another drop of coke or anything resembles soda i will have you LOCKED in a mental assylum!
I'm sorry if you dont want anyone to read this and want it to "sink" or whatever that is.
But im reading through all of your poems right now (I'm in usyd-edu lab) and I've got ages till my next lect. so you have to SUFFER bebe!!
I actually liked this poem a lot-it shows the definate crazy streak you have!
You know I love you lots!

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9 posted 2001-12-11 11:55 AM


*beats Cherish with a foam bat*
Silly girl! This does not suck at all!! In fact, I rather enjoyed it so  

It has a lot of feeling to it which is always a good thing. Poems without feelings are just....words.  

Thanks for posting it and thank my hands for typing in the words that enabled me to look at it...lol.

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

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