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dramaqueen22086
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0 posted 2001-06-12 06:27 PM


this is an ok poem, i wrote it when it was raining, and since i was bored out of my mind. i worte it....
tell me what you think.

The last rain drop
It starts with just one cloud in the sky
I look up at it, while the day passes by.

How quickly it changes from white to gray
And still under the oak tree I stay.

I hear the 1st pitter patter, of the 1st little drop
I feel the rain get up and look up.

The rain is so fresh, and feels so good inside
When I’m out in the rain, I have nothing to hide.

All around me it rains, and rains and then rains some more
It starts getting heavy so I run to my door.

My cloths are all wet, and I’m soaked to the bone
I run inside and get dry off, and warm and so glade that I’m home.

I sit by the window and hope it will never stop
But I see the light cloud and hear the last rain drop.


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1 posted 2001-06-12 06:32 PM


Hey,

    This is a really good poem!!! I loved it    until younext master work

      -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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2 posted 2001-06-12 07:50 PM


Well done here. I enjoyed this piece a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Dana Samples
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3 posted 2001-06-12 09:50 PM


WHOA!! I LOVED, I LOVED, I LOVED!!! THIS ROKED MAJOR (beep)!! I am so obsessed w/ the rain. its the one thing that truely makes me happy.     keep up the work.
love always, dana

the_rescue
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4 posted 2001-06-13 09:07 AM


that's cool man I love the rain at least when its not a thunderstorm but that's all we get around here so.    oh good poem by the way  

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over.  (SPOKEN)

stace_co2003
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5 posted 2001-06-13 09:34 PM


I like this poem...I really enjoyed it...how odd I should read it after the first downpour we've had in about a month, lol...well, that's probably an exaggeration..but ANYWAY!!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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6 posted 2001-06-13 11:08 PM


i really liked the images...nicely written ...great job!...bye Kellie

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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