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No desire to be on Top |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
As soon as you're born, they make you feel small by giving you no time, instead of it all Till the pain is so big, you feel nothing at all They hurt you at home and hit at you school They hate you if you're clever and they despise a fool Till you're so freaking crazy, you can't follow their rules When they tortured and scared you for 18 years then they expect you to go and pick a career You can't really function You're so full of fear You've been doped by religion, people, and TV You still think you're so clever and classless and free But you're still freaking peasants as far as I can see. They tell me theres still room up on the hill But you have to learn how to smile as you kill. This Is Not Here |
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never_a_princess Member
since 2001-06-09
Posts 82Show Me the Money |
i do TOO like this one! it's kinda..odd(thas not the word i really wanted...but i couldn't of a better one)..but i like it..you mighta been bein weird when you wrote it or w/e, but it still has a sense of truth to it..someone in the world prolly does feel like this..if it's not you *hugz* good poem, Ewokz ~Anna *waves* |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Very, very interesting. Very true as well. The last two lines were especially powerful. It was a great ending to your poem. "...if you want love you must be love.." Billy Corgan, Smashing Pumpkins [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 06-12-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Kill in the sense of conquering your fears and being on the top on the hill. That's how I took it..... I liked the poem...very well written.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Julian L. Chester Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 50 |
i find your poem so exstrordinary excellent fabulous and a perfect way to show how you feel with school and how it is in the real world keep it up and never forget yourself in the process. |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
this was a realy good poem the flow was good and the rhymes fit well. Rescue in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I really liked this. very good work. hmmm....the poem was very powerful.keep it up |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
What an interesting poem  I really enjoyed this one...Nice |
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