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Teen Poetry #4

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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-06-09 01:09 PM

Let me go
leave your sunshine at the door
don't come in here
why do u want to torture yourself
Take your coat and leave
Do u see what i've turned into
don't remember me like this
go already!
Your not needed here anymore
Take your sunshine
bring your smiles to someone else
someone worth it
someone is not a disgrace
walk away...please don't run
Don't forget to smile for me once im gone
just smile and remember

Regina

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-09 01:12 PM

i like the tone of this poem...and the two poems seem similar or is it just me

...you should make it a series

...i really liked it...bye ina

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

2 posted 2001-06-09 01:27 PM

yeah..those poems do inda lead into one another...a series perhaps???

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-10 01:02 AM

Nicely done here. I liked this one a lot regi! I like these poems yer putting out lately!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

4 posted 2001-06-10 01:06 AM

Nice style. nice nice nice. Nicely done I really like this poem. I'm gonna check out the others

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2001-09-08 04:19 AM

The last two lines were the best in the entire piece. It's the finality of the situation that caught my eye.
Once again, great work. jeez...do you ever write crappy poetry?

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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