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PiXiEpUnKeR
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since 2001-06-06
Posts 49
IL, USA

0 posted 2001-06-07 11:32 PM


Fresh cut blades
and pear colored leaves
uncontrollable laughter
and running from bees

Shoot down the ramps
and jump from the swings
run with the squirrels
and feed every bird that sings

Cool beads of sweat
"Mommy just a little more!"
"We still haven't decided
the winner of the war!"

Attack from the slide
hide on the merry-go-round
Sooner or later
she's captured on the ground

Rolling amongst
the beating down heat
"Kids come on! It's time to eat!"

The war left at a draw
they jump over the logs
an undecided victory
forgotten for hotdogs

© Copyright 2001 Andriana Fico - All Rights Reserved
HVNsnt82086
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since 2001-06-05
Posts 30
United States
1 posted 2001-06-07 11:36 PM


hahaha! i loved this! it reminds me of playing when i was little, and give the vision of a perfect summer day! it's great!!

"So when you feel like hope is gone, look inside you and be strong, and you'll finally see the truth...that a hero lies in you." *~Mariah Carey- Hero~

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21
Posts 255

2 posted 2001-06-07 11:42 PM


aww very cute..... good job

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

anonymous albert ?
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3 posted 2001-06-08 12:23 PM


haha...i liked this...very creative poem...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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4 posted 2001-06-09 11:16 PM


Well done! Very creatively written. I liked this one!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
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5 posted 2001-06-09 11:36 PM


Very nice! Good job!!


Bel

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