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Tamma

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since 2000-01-17

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In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

0 posted 2001-01-27 09:30 AM

ok, this kind of poem is sort of new for me...I've never tried to tell a story in my poetry, atleast, not like this

Girl meets Boy

This isn’t your typical story...
I’ll start from the beginning,
Girl has had some rough relationships,
As a matter of fact, she was in one,
The night Boy walked into her life.
They became friends and she confided in him,
Boy was the only one that told her the truth:
That Girl and the “other” guy wouldn’t last.
Now, Girl was quite upset about that,
But she knew that Boy was right.
This “other” guy never called,
And every day, she began to like Boy,
Even more than she had the day before.
One day, Girl was already upset,
Because of a run-in the night before,
You see, Guy’s ex had talked to her.
And as it would seem, they’re in love again.
Girl thought it was all lies to get Guy back,
But the next day, Guy showed up at school,
To break off what was left of the relationship.
Now, Girl got quite upset, as you can imagine,
And who was the very first person she saw?
Why, It was Boy, of course, and she talked to him,
And fell even more in love with him.
Girl felt so awful about everything,
They sent her home from school.
But not before she talked to Boy,
He comforted her, just like she needed.
Girl didn’t make it home ‘til later that day,
She went out with Sister to take her mind,
Off of everything that’s gone wrong.
When she got home, Brother comforted her,
And told her she’d find another guy.
“Oh yea, sis, Guess you were right,
You wouldn’t make it to Thursday!”
Girl smiled, cause she had told Brother,
That who knew if they’d last ‘til Thursday,
Somehow, that made Girl feel better.
Later that night, the phone rang,
Which gave girl a surprise,
It was Boy, calling to see if she was ok.
Now, Girl and Boy talked and talked,
For what seemed to Girl’s mom like hours,
But once Girl’s dad got home, she had to go.
Girl’s dad asked why she looked so upset,
So she told him about what happened with Guy,
And all her dad could say was:
“You’ll find someone else.”
To which, Girl replied, “Yea, I like Boy”
Girl’s dad just rolled his eyes.
None of them, not even Girl or Boy,
Knew what was going to happen.
The next day, Girl was so happy,
She knew she liked Boy,
And thought Boy liked her.
She got a friend to ask if he did,
And the friend returned,
Asking if Girl wanted to hook up with Boy.
Girl was about half in shock,
But still wanted to hook up with Boy.
Now, Girl and Boy have been dating,
For about 4 and a half months,
They argue and bicker every now and then,
But they’re still doing good.
And Girl’s just amazed,
She’s never felt this good.
Girl has never been in love,
Like this before.

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I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

1 posted 2001-01-27 11:41 AM

Oooo Tamma!! *dances around in happiness for you* This is a really great piece! You should do more of these. Its a different style for you and like I have said before, different is good.

It's just superb. Lovely Tamma.

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-01-27 02:43 PM

*looks at AF dance*
damn she needs some lessons
*pops out like lord of the dance*
tatatatatatatatatatatatatata skip skip skip tatatatatatatatattatatatatatatata flip skip tap tap tip!

TADA!!!!!!!
*bows*

Nice poem tamma!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-01-27 02:50 PM

You're like the third story teller i've read today
I'm glad that you are happy
hope you stay that way
great poem/story
thanks for the read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

AniKay83
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since 2000-06-28

Posts 388
Missing Since 1999

4 posted 2001-01-27 03:57 PM

Great story.

"Hearts will become practical when they make them unbreakable"
~The Wizard of Oz
Much love all,
Krissie

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

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In the space between moments

5 posted 2001-01-27 09:36 PM

Well told Tamma! I liked this very much, keep up the good work.

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

6 posted 2001-01-27 09:48 PM

this is great!! both the way it's written and the story!! so lucky!!

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

7 posted 2001-01-27 11:04 PM

Great story, I loved it, especially how you used no names. Good luck

Bel

Tamma

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since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

8 posted 2001-01-29 07:06 PM

Well, if ya'll haven't guessed, in this poem, I'm "Girl" and Justin's "Boy". And it's all true

Sorry, I'm trying to keep this thread goin, since I've been kinda dead (heh) when it comes to my poetry.

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I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me

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