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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
You tried to kill me Slowly I ran away from you Stepping back didn't seem enough There was nothing left to do. One step after the other I fled from your haunting eyes At night I still dream of you Yet I hear my desperate cries. They break the silence Of the night, so calm With deaf'ning blows to the ears. I wake up shaking On a dead winter's night To find myself in tears. How the wind screams How the thunder roars As the waves crash upon The sandy shores. To be me again To be safe once more Will never happen Not like before. You hurt me In a way I never knew So quietly, so secretly I thought it couldn't be true. You stole my heart You stole my soul And I never knew How it felt before. But now I know And I'll never go back But I'll always remember Your violent attack. I hide behind shades To cover the bruise On my face I still feel The soles of your shoes. I cover myself From head to toe To hide all the scars From every fierce blow. I do nothing but hide Away from them all I fear their gazes I fear I may fall. I loathe you I hate you inside But I know I can't kill you As long as I'm alive. ========== I feel as though I have no right to write this... "If I find in myself desires which nothing in this world can satisfy, the only logical explanation is that i was made for another world." -C.S.Lewis [This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 06-02-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful...deep emotions...you expressed so much pain...i think you did an great job on writing this...must of been hard as the situation is a very hard one...hope you are alright  ...i really liked this poem leah...quite impact...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
To tell you the truth, i've never been in this situation before...which is why i feel like i have no right to write about something that's never happened to me...I hope to never have it happen to me...so much hate. Can't bear it... "If I find in myself desires which nothing in this world can satisfy, the only logical explanation is that i was made for another world." |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Wow I loved this poem. It was beautiful It's so going in my library. Why do you feel like you shouldn't be writing this? When writing a poem it doesnt have to be from YOUR experiences, it can be relates to others experiences Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think regardless of you going through the situation or not you can write about it. I think this had a lot of emotion within it. Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Well, in truth, it was your nick that convinced me to make that little click, but i find your poem harsh, rude and somewhat, violent...ah, you capture humanity so well! Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
powerful intense read i liked these two lines a lot: On my face i still feel the soles of your shoes subtle but effective, i thought |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Why do you feel that you have no right to write this???? Thats silly...you have the right to write anything your lil heart wishes. I thought this was a wonderful poem and i just loved all the emotion and feelings within it. Great job |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
aww great job! but it is sad  still great..  Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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