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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Sometimes I breathe hard, just to make sure I'm still breathing. Sometimes I look out the window after you, just to make sure you're still leaving. Sometimes I get so cold, just because of how nervous I am with you. Sometimes I cry at night, just to make sure I get it all out before the next day. Sometimes I wish for a miracle, just because I want you to see how I feel. Sometimes I think I don't love you anymore, and then I realize that I couldn't go through life without loving you. not good, I know, but oh well, I'm tired and my homeroom one tug-of-war. YIPEE! I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I thought this was really good  |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
hey, another good piece! you know whats weriod, my name is Alyssa, so is yours and your last name is Ryan , or so this thing says, and thats my boyfriends name, and i had a friend jessica too  good piece again! ±Ålyssa± |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow, situation this is confusing.  Ah, well... good poem, congrats on winning tug-o-war.  Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Allysa, from the pieces I have read about this fella so far, you need to TELL him some of these things. Other wise instead of winning the home room tug of war, you'll lose the emotional one. Keep your head up. ~AF~ Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Also, Alyssa, we both live in ohio. Strange coincidence. Hmmm. ANyways, af, I don't know HOW to tell him. It's hard. there's so much to tell him and so little time. I move away in twenty four days, but atleast it's not twenty four hours. ANyways, byes. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
i know you'll figure out a way to tell the guy. i have faith! lol. great poem by the way. -fear- |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I liked this one!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
BE PROUD OF ME!!!!!!!! I told Justin what I've needed to tell him since September 19, 2000. I told him how I felt that the whole Jesica thing was all my fault and all that, and how I felt bad because I never called her and everything and he made me feel better. For once, instead of joking around to make me laugh or whatever, he actually told me "it's not your fault, it's not your fault, you didn't know it was gonna happen" and EVERYTHING'S ALL BETTER NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!! I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
well good for you Allysa. Poem wasn't your best, that I'll admit to I know you can do better and would like you to keep writing okies hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very intertesing emotions here...i liked the poem...you wrote it nicely...but if this situation goes on like this...its not going to get better...i think you and this guy need to do some talking...good luck ...hope things work out...bye Alyssa  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
good job sis! alyssa "At nude weddings everybody can see the best man!" "I have a glass house with no windows" "save a horse, ride a cowboy!!!" |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I like this poem!! I can totally relate...like..completely... I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was good , not your best though. |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
wow, honestly, i didn't care too much for this poem as a whole...but i absolutely fell in love with the lines about sometimes i watch you as you're leaving to make sure that you're still leaving or whatever...because i do that too and it hit so close to home and made my heart ache. i loved that part so much~! and even if only one part of a poem is good, it means that the poet has so much potential and i can't wait to read more from ya! "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Sometimes i feel all of this too.. really nice poem keep em comin |
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